Bobby Vossen

1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
Seans future career in Navy

2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
You could have used info from the Navy website

3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Yes, he sets up the school very nicely and has lots of detail

4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
More of what Sean did to prepare for the Navy